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Back to Mushroom Kingdom; BtMK
Topic Started: Jan 1 2008, 05:05 PM (353 Views)
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This is my Comic Back to Mushroom Kingdom, Mario and Luigi take another random warp-pipe and get lost.

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Chapter 1
#1 Stupid Warp-Pipe
#2 Goombink
#3 An Ally and Enemy

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Missingno
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Neat,like your avatar also.
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LuigiMan
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Well, your comic is pretty good, but it has room for improvement. I would mostly suggest that you either have Mario and Luigi switch places or have Mario's speech bubble over Luigi's, because in all the panels, Mario talks before Luigi, yet Luigi's speech bubble comes first, which makes it confusing.
Another thing would be that the background is a bit boring and plain, but that might be intentional because I don't know where they're supposed to be, the setting might not need any objects or terrain for all I know. So I guess that doesn't need fixing if you meant for it to be plain to make the story fit.
These are the only problems I can see so far, so you're on the right track.
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Jan 1 2008, 06:32 PM
Well, your comic is pretty good, but it has room for improvement. I would mostly suggest that you either have Mario and Luigi switch places or have Mario's speech bubble over Luigi's, because in all the panels, Mario talks before Luigi, yet Luigi's speech bubble comes first, which makes it confusing.
Another thing would be that the background is a bit boring and plain, but that might be intentional because I don't know where they're supposed to be, the setting might not need any objects or terrain for all I know. So I guess that doesn't need fixing if you meant for it to be plain to make the story fit.
These are the only problems I can see so far, so you're on the right track.

Lol, it's beacuse I read a whole lot of Manga... and yes the backdrop will have more...later.

Also, Missingno thanks, i made the avatar myself.
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Sorry for the double post, but here's Comic Number 2.
LuigiMan, I took what you said and put the speech bubbles at different heights.
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Triumphant Return!
I like how the background isn't just a solid color; it has a slight gradient effect to it.
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TriforceMan
Jan 2 2008, 02:18 AM
I like how the background isn't just a solid color; it has a slight gradient effect to it.

Thank you. I've figured out how to use the GIMP. So that's how I do it.
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Sorry for the double post again, but heres Comic number 3
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Triumphant Return!
Rather than having the frames so far apart, just put them side by side.
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These are pretty neat, good job...
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Rather than having the frames so far apart, just put them side by side.


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These are pretty neat, good job...


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