| The Vartrak Saga: Eve of an Era; Part One of the Vartrak Saga. | |
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| Lt Merthak | 9th May 2007 - 08:26 PM Post #1 |
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Thirteen days ago Vartrak would have been relaxing in his home in Fort Deerthak, with no worries about death and war. Now he was standing with his bodyguards at the eye of a storm, and the armies of Clan Rethsak were all around. A sweep of his sword brought four clanrats to their knees; blows bounced off his heavy armour. His bodyguards pushed outwards and in a maelstrom of blades felled at least fourteen more warriors. "Ratling guns fire-fire!!!" He cried at the nearby weapon placements. He turned briefly to his lieutenant Korak and sighed,"Bring-bring out the spearhead force. Wait-wait, pull back first." The chieftain and his guard withdrew in a dignified manner. The spread-out army fled swiftly. Vartrak whirled his great blade above his head as Korak gave orders. The main force marched forward swords drawn. Their superior numbers meant that the Rethsak frontlines were crushed.The rats of Deerthak veered round behind the foe and battled their way back to the Deerthak encampment. The battle was for the Eighth Gateway, which lay at the end of the three-forked Zettibet Roadway. If this battle was won the clan would be able to join battle in the Underpyramid once again, fighting for treasures beyond the visions of Skaven. Vartrak would be able to at last withdraw from the frontlines. The leader sniffed. Something was wrong. As Rethsak soldiers came bearing down upon the newly formed shield wall Vartrak pushed his way to the front of his trained cadre of veteran clanrats. He could smell the musk of fear... right next to him. Korak was spraying it and looking at something in the distance. Vartrak calmed his panicking army and followed Korak's gaze. Three things happened. A charging squad of Rethsak Skaven led by a spear-bearing chieftain shot into the tightly-packed rats. The chieftain threw his spear into Korak. A bat-like shadow sank into the fray and all that was seen was a flash of blades and a shower of blood. By the Horned One, thought Vartrak. What an age-age we live in. Hope you enjoyed the first true chapter of the Vartrak saga! Bit short but oh well... |
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| SneakyRodent | 10th May 2007 - 07:37 AM Post #2 |
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Short, but not badly written at all Merthak! And for some reason the very last line makes me chuckle as I picture the venerable Vartrak pausing amidst the chaos to shake his head sadly at the thought
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| Bodacious | 10th May 2007 - 07:57 AM Post #3 |
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Yeah, it was quite good .Short stories are often more effective than huge chapters in my experience, because they're much more inviting to read and a better fit for forum posting. A solid way to increase the number of response you'll get. Cheers, Bodacious. |
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| Plagress | 10th May 2007 - 01:23 PM Post #4 |
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That was pretty good. Only prob that I got is that I can't wait for more.
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| Lt Merthak | 10th May 2007 - 06:14 PM Post #5 |
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Thanks people... um, Sneaky... Vartrak is not exactly...<ahem> venerable. This story is all set in his past, fifty-three years ago. The entire Vartrak saga is. But when I start fluff in a couple of years on the SECOND Surnik War you'll see a much older wiser Vartrak... heehee... Yes, I've plotted out his life. I want to see him fail and he will
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