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    Link's Battle; A fan-fic by TheGamer2
    Topic Started: Oct 12 2004, 04:30 PM (357 Views)
    TheGamer2
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    Ok here is a story I have been thinking of....

    I'll probably change it, and mess around with it until I get something I like, but heres one version of it....


    Chapter one


    One very sunny day Link was practicing with his sword. In the field of Hyrule.
    When one of the Gorons came down from Death Mountain. “Hi Link, how are you doing this fine day?” asked the goron. “Good, how are you Jake?” Link replied. “Oh, I've been having a great day; I'm on my way to the river.” Jake said. “Why are you going there?” asked Link.” I'm going fishing. Do you want to join me?” Jake said. “Sure I'll come along.” Link replied. He put his sword away, and got his fishing rod out.
    “Ok let’s get going” Jake said.
    They both began to walk down to the river.

    Later on in the castle Zelda was thinking to herself. “I wonder what Link is doing.” She walked over to a window, and sat down on it: looking at the sky. “It's such a beautiful day, I wish I could go outside, but daddy said no because, I have to go get fitted for my dress for tonight’s party.”

    Link and Jake arrived at the river. Link was looking for a worm, while Jake jump into the river and started catching fish with his hands.
    “Jake!! Will you not make so much noise you’re going to scare all the fish away.”
    Link said under his breath. “I heard that!!” Jack said. What do you mean by scare all the fish away. Look at how many I have.” Jake added.
    Links eyes grew huge in surprise when he started to count over three fish that Jake cot.

    “Wow Jake!!! You are a really good fisher.” Link said. “Why thank you Link. Maybe if I’m nice enough I’ll give you some tips.” Jake replied while laughing.
    Link also started to laugh.

    After a few hours passed Link and Jake began to walk home.
    As they were walking home Link noticed the sky was black. “That’s odd. I wonder why the sky is so dark.” Link said. “Yeah, it’s not even that late.” Said Jake puzzled

    Link started to look around, and he saw that smoke was coming form the forest. “Look!!!!” Link shouted. “The forest it’s on fire!!!” Links said to Jake. “We need to put it out.”

    They both start to run to the forest.

    In the mean time Zelda is at the party: dancing with a prince from another kingdom.
    “I’m so very bored, I wish Link was here. He would know how to cheer me up” Zelda was thinking to herself.
    “Hey Zelda are you ok?” The prince asks. “Oh!! I’m fine, but I’m a little tired.”
    Zelda replies.” Well you should take a seat, and I’ll go get you something to drink.”
    The prince said to Zelda. “Ok I will.”
    Zelda walked over to a table in the corner.
    She looked out the window and saw the forest on fire.
    She jumps up, and ran to her father. “Daddy!! Daddy!! The forest is on fire. Come quick.”
    The King walked over to the window and saw the forest on fire.” Your right my daughter, we need to do some thing.” The King told Zelda.
    The king walked over to his head knight and told him about the fire, and soon over 50 knights were on there way to put out the fire.
    “Daddy, please let me go too.” Zelda asks her dad. “I’m sorry Zelda, but you can’t go with, it’s too dangerous.” The King says in a firm voice.
    Zelda walked off looking mad.
    A few moments later she sneaked into the barn, and jumped on a house, and began to ride off to the forest. ”Maybe Link will be there.” Zelda was thinking to herself.



    What do you all think?

    P.S. I hope theres not to many mistakes....
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    Good job so far!
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    VGV Owner
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    Very good especially since I didn't really like Zelda . . .

    One mistake though .. . .

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    “I’m sorry Zelda, but you can’t go with, it’s too dangerous


    Look at that sentence . . .

    It should be . . .

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    "I'm sorry Zelda, but you can't go with them, it's too dangerous


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    I also think you meant Jake . . . ^_^
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    That's good so far!!!!! ;) :D
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    TheGamer2
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    So does any one want to see the next chapter? :)
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    Nov 2 2004, 05:50 AM
    So does any one want to see the next chapter? :)

    Yeah!!!!
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    Infierno
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    Thats good
    Old Screennames: Ghost, Jumpman, SoulCalibur, Mario Sunshine2.0, Soul, Soulcalibur, PrinceVaati, FuzzyLlama, banmeplzkthxbai, I_phail_lolololol, MattB2289O More soon =D
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    John
    I want to be a scribble pad moderator!
    ....pretty nice.
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    when will you post chapter 2??
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    TheGamer2
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    I'll post chapter two, when a get some good ideas for it... :)
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    Okay, i thought u abandoned this. :)
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    TheGamer2
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    Nope I'm still working on it...
    Also look at my new fan fic it's called Wallace Rants... It's really funny...
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