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Tsukiyo
Topic Started: Nov 17 2009, 09:48 PM (203 Views)
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Username: Tsukiyo
Preferred Name: Nita
Age (optional): 21
Years role-playing: 7 years
Favorite Genre: Anything that doesn't deal with love at first sight. I love a good rp where the characters grow on each other one way or another. I also prefer original rps with original characters. This includes: vampires, mutants, nonfiction, dragons, elves, all of it!
Least favorite genre: Shonen-ai, and fanfic type stuff.

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The echo of the door closing was loud in his ears. Riku lifted his head slowly. It was still throbbing from whatever they had used to knock him out be it drug or an object. His lips parted to let out a miserable groan as he lifted his head to take in his surroundings. He was in a cell, alone. His light brown eyes shifted higher in a daze. His slender arms were trapped above his head held together with thick rusty grey cuffs and a chain that hung from the ceiling. The ceiling was high enough so that his five-eight frame hung inches away from the floor below him. His barefeet curled around each other unconsciously feeling a icy draft flitting in from various cracks in the stone walls. How did he get himself into something like this? Why did it have to turn out this way? All he wanted to do was to return a key had found in his pocket.

Said key had been taken by another man seconds before he was taken to this place on the grounds that he had been sneaking into a harem and sleeping with some important figure head's concubines.

"This country is daffy." Riku growled finally squinted to find the keyhole of his cuffs. He couldn't see it in the poorly lit room. He mentally cursed. He just had to come to this place with his father. What was supposed to be a simple business trip for his father was supposed to be a chance for exploration, adventure, fun for Riku. Yet here he was.

He turned his head toward the door. There was a small window that was left cracked open. The hallway or whatever that led to the cell was just as dark as the rest of the cell. He shook his head ruefully sending his jaw length brown and red streaked hair into his face. At least they had let him keep his clothes. His grey-blue jeans were slightly dingy and his white long sleeved shirt was smeared from being dragged. All in all it could have been worse.

He sighed and flexed his fingers slightly. His weight was making his wrist pull and the circulation to his fingers slow leaving the digits cold. Riku wondered how long he would have to be hear before his father would come looking for him. The idiot probably doesn't even know I'm gone. Won't know until he half way back to America. He thought to himself. His father wasn't never the attentive kind. He had his own little agenda at times and Riku was often the last thing on his mind.

"Well, well, well, you boy's got a nice one."

Riku twisted to look over his shoulder to the new voice. Beady brown eyes looked back at him. "He's a young one, brand new it looks like." The door creaked open slowly revealing a short portly looking man with clammy skin. He reach forward with grubby fingers running them down the suspended boy's waist. Riku's eyes widened in disgust.

"Don't touch me!" He shouted kicking his legs out. He winced as his bare foot connected with the man's sharp buck teeth but followed through with the kick regardless. The man stumbled back covering his mouth mournfully. Seconds later, a dark sensual chuckle filled the room. Riku looked back to the door still swaying from the momentum of his own kick.

"W-whose there?" He questioned.
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Just a few pointers, you repeat a couple of things here and there that could easily be replaced with other words. Break out the dusty ol’ thesaurus on occasion just for kicks. Other than that I’ve spotted a few punctuation mistakes and an occasional grammatical mistake that I’m taking as a typo (happens to everyone.) Other than that, good job.


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