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| ChristianSTARR | Mar 17 2018, 12:40 PM Post #1 |
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Please feedback my latest RP Christian STARR Diaries: Chapter Five Thanks |
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| userpoets | Mar 17 2018, 11:31 PM Post #2 |
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I was about to call bullshit on the believability of the Starr/Payne fight at the start, it seemed completely unbelievable and out of left field, until Starr at the end essentially said he was baiting him to test his temparament. Much better. Was a little less impressed with the Starr/Allison stuff. I get it that they've had issues, and that Allison is skeptical about his return to the ring. However, I wasn't able to believe that she would immediately get skeptical and refuse to go. It seems like a more realistic reaction would be to appreciate the trip and use it as a litmus test to see if their relationship had a future. But that's a personal choice, and the rule of drama was more important here, as it should be. Promo was typical STARR - quality as always. |
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| Mia Rayne | Mar 18 2018, 01:26 AM Post #3 |
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Starr reminds me of a couple characters. One that I created and one of a person that I used to compete against in Hostility. Regardless, in my eyes he's one of those Miz like characters (in the best way possible.) He's that guy that draws so much heat, becomes so good at it and excels at it, he just becomes over with the fans regardless. I love the Miz and I hate to say it but I might be becoming a (small) fan of Christian Starr. One day I'd love a chance to go one on one again. Mayhaps with Payne even considering that their last run in didn't turn out so well... *Shrugs* I enjoy your writing and can't wait to see what else you have in store for us! |
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| TheRealDC | Mar 19 2018, 11:26 PM Post #4 |
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I dug the first part with Payne, just a little character development. Not too much, not pointless, just enough. The middle bit with Allison though, I was a bit confused. If her dream is to visit these places, it's a bit odd to suddenly back out after being so excited. She's already taken the leap of faith to rejoin Starr... so why now the doubt? They share a bed. Bit weird. If this was happening on a date or something, probably would have worked better. Or reference some form of her doubt in his actions/words during one of your previous promos. The promo was on point. It is quite nice to see how far you've come. But I'm speaking from a different area entirely. |
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| ChristianSTARR | Mar 24 2018, 08:41 PM Post #5 |
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I'm going to take one out of D.C.'s book and just recycle my Feedback thread. So STARR 3:16 says feedback my newest RP Christian STARR Diaries: Chapter Six § Thanks |
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| The Weaver of Dreams | Mar 25 2018, 04:52 PM Post #6 |
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I really enjoy your character and the interaction he has with Eli. The flashbacks are still great, since they slowly bring us up to speed with what happened pre-CWF and then the banter with Eli and the obviously different points of view for many things, yet in the end it still gets done. I really liked how D.C. and Paige came in, even though it left me a little confused as to: Christian STARR: "Wait, so she's-" Eli Silver: "Yeup, with a capital L, my friend." Christian STARR: "And also your-" Eli Silver: "For about eight years now yeah. I thought you knew. It's not exactly a secret." But I really liked the reaction of Starr and that it took him a while to snap out of it ![]() Match talk was excellent as ever, Starr is one of my favourite characters right now, because everything feels natural and flowing
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| PlayerOne | Mar 25 2018, 07:39 PM Post #7 |
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Pfffft what is this...![]() Will look to give proper feedback after the match me thinks |
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| ChristianSTARR | Apr 11 2018, 01:11 PM Post #8 |
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Christian STARR Diaries: Chapter 7 😎 |
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