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Topic Started: Mar 16 2018, 05:03 PM (63 Views)
The Kitchen Nightmare

I’d be very interested to hear what people thought of my debut piece :)
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TheLostBoys

Not only is this a tough first match to debut in, but I feel like you have quite the task ahead of you to make your character with that particular gimmick work and seem credibly in the long term.

I know some of your opponents in that Battle Royale didn't give a lot to work from (Am the handler of Impakt so am guilty of that) but I do feel as if you could have said more. If not about specific opponents, about Ramsay himself ( know he's supposed to be a contexualised bastardisation of Gordon but I feel you'll need to flesh out the character as well) and/or about the importance of the match (it leads into what is a historical first for the CWF so it is a big deal).

I am speaking strictly from my point of view here. I can see what your intention is with your rps, going full on into the Gordon Ramsay character by having their own reality tv show but personally it didn't work all that well for me. I felt it hindered the narrative flow and make it harder for me to get a feel for the character and get engrossed.

In saying that this was your first post for a match that was by no way an easy thing to rp for, you could have ideas and stories cooking (see hat I did there :P) that completely turns my comments on their heads.
I am just wary of how restrictive your idea may be for you, though I do respect your creative ambition.

If I could give any advice I would say in-keeping with the Chef Ramsay idea, try to personalise it, to make your character more unique and compelling, instead of relying simply on the parody or being a carbon-copy (It actually stifles you). There is immense potential there for sure and I'd like to see you find that niche where your originality and the Gordon Ramsay context collide to create a great comedic character.
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Mia Rayne

So... You have me hooked and I'm intrigued. I'm curious only because I don't think I've ever seen this type of thing attempted, so I applaud you for your creativity.

I'm looking forward to the future adventures of Ramsay Gordon.
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The Weaver of Dreams
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I like it, it introduces the character pretty well and I just find it hilarious! It is a fine line, though, between a pure parody and something that has enough lasting substance to make it longer term. Roid Rogers had managed to make it work and there is no reason to believe that you couldn't, but it's a dangerous path you might be walking on.

Match talk is a bit thin maybe, but like Dallas said, this is a very ungrateful match to start your "career" in, not really knowing all the characters (some of them being pretty new, too) or the ins and outs, for that it was pretty good :)
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