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Topic Started: Feb 17 2018, 10:34 AM (50 Views)
ChristianSTARR
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Hey, hey, hey.. just posted Christian STARR Diaries: Chapter 2 would love to get everyones thoughts on it.

Thanks B)
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The Weaver of Dreams
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Yes, you can has feedback :)

I really enjoyed the rp, from the flashback that builds on last week's rp to the present that shows how the relationship with Eli has grown and how the confidence has come back to Starr. It's well written and flows well and makes me want to read more, makes me want to get to know more of the character's past and present and how he got there. Match talk is maybe a little thin, but a) you're new to the fed and b) against two people having their first match, so you weren't dealt a great hand for that part.

All in all very enjoyable and very happy to have you on board!
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TheLostBoys

Nice!
The story being told is clear and exudes degree of realism.
The way it's written is gripping and depicts the character in a humanising manner, further engaging the reader.
Coming into the CWF Christian has a metric tonne of baggage and he reflects that very well.
The characterisation of Christian is enjoyable, you write him very well lol.

For me I wasn't exactly blown-away by the match-talk, not bad per se, it just didn't really jump out at me. It felt 'safe', if that makes sense.

I liked the note you finished on, getting yourself straight into the fed-wide arc from the get go.

I like the story you've started to tell and I enjoy the character you've created.
Am looking forward to how you progress and develop.
Great effort
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