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| The_Needler | May 1 2005, 07:48 PM Post #16 |
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The Needler.....thats it.....
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here is chapter three (and yes LINK is high during his part:D) and sin, suck buddhas cock :D Chapter III: The Dark Side “Is the deed done, Chaos?” asked Solaris. “Indeed it is master. But I fear that the young one I had hoped not be there may have saved him,” They were on a ship peering into space on the main deck. It was an enormous ship called “The Inferior”. A man walked in, he was a black man with a white and red robe on. “Sin!!” yelled Solaris, “You have burdened me for the last time!!!!” as he yelled this he turned around, started to choke Sin and then opened a retrieval hatch and threw him out. They both watched as, for a moment, Sin flailed around and then POP! His body burst into pieces as blood gushed out and spread everywhere. Solaris chuckled lightly, and then burst into laughter. Chaos soon followed, making the whole main deck sound as if it was a playground for children. “That solves that problem.” Solaris said as he calmed down and sat in his black leather chair. In another ship called “The Corrision” a man named LINK sat in the owners lounge. He was a most peculiar man dressed in a black tuxedo, his eyes where dilated. He bent over onto his desk took a big exhale of blue powder, obviously a narcotic. LINK was a drug smuggler and a mighty fine one indeed, he had met Needler one day at a bar before Needler was even a Jedi yet. It was a fine evening at the Tut-Tut bar. Needler just ordered food and water, when this man came and sat down next to him. He was dressed the same as he is now, and he had ordered a Milotoxin, which was a drink that would kill a human if he’d be stupid enough to order it. “Wow you like to drink heavy eh?” The Needler said. “Yeah this is nothing compared to what I drink when I’ve had a bad night. Man you couldn’t imagine…” LINK answered. “By the way, my names LINK.” And for the rest of that whole evening Needler and LINK exchanged thoughts and interests. After that Needler never saw LINK again. “Hurry up!!” LINK yelled frantically, worried he wasn’t going to arrive on time. “I have but 10 minutes till I have to be there!” His computer blinked and showed that the speed increased 10 light years p/hr. “That’s more like it!” he yelled. They were heading for Onderon, a desolate forest planet with a large port and exchange unit. Back on The Inferior, Solaris gave Chaos new instructions: Kill Daemon, seduce Virus, and capture Needler. He took these orders without question and took more Sith with him, one by the name of Tavo, one named Blade and another by Lynx. They all boarded his ship “The NeverJenk”, lifted off and headed strait for Dantooine. |
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| The_Needler | May 1 2005, 08:35 PM Post #17 |
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The Needler.....thats it.....
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whew here is chapter four (i just finished it, fuck its long) enjoy Chapter IV: The Accidental Meet Needler walked into the hospital, and stood before all of the members of the Jedi. “Needler, you have been selected to go with your master, Daemon, Tar, and Blue, to a distant moon off of Onderon known as Dxun.” ID said. Needler still clutched The Dragons Wing in his fist. “Wait a minute,” ID said, “Aren’t you a double blade user?” “Yes, but I keep this saber. It was my fathers.” “Who was your father?” “Master Yindor,” Needler replied. He knew what ID thought of him now. His father was a Jedi who had betrayed the Jedi Order; he tried to assassinate ID and was struck down in the act by Daemon who, at that time, was IDs apprentice. This gave ID a bad feeling, he now thought that this one may also try and betray the Order. But he mentioned nothing of it. They all left and boarded “The Majestic”, their ship. The ship rumbled and with a gigantic roar, fired up. The Jedi had no idea what they were about to face, a great battle. The ship finally reached the most beautiful moon known as Dxun. It was a jungle planet home to the hidden race known as the Mandalorians. “We’re here!” Needler exclaimed, exited to finally be on a mission of great importance. The ship landed quietly and the Jedi got ready to leave. Meanwhile, back on The Corrision, LINK was very worried. His ship had just accidentally hit a huge meteor, and was falling apart now, piece by piece. “Shit!!” LINK yelled. “Land on that moon there,” he said, calmer, as he pointed to a jungle looking planet off of Onderon. “Roger that sir, put on your seatbelts gentlemen, we’re goin’ in,” The pilot announced. Also meanwhile, on The NeverJenk, Chaos announced that they are now heading for the moon known as Dxun, because he has felt the presence of the Jedi there. The ship literally changed direction and sped up a little. “I call Daemon,” said Chaos. “You guys can kill whoever you want but don’t lay a finger on Daemon. I need to finish the job.” The Jedi left the ship heading strait for the Mandalorians. They were going to ask them for their help in the war against the Sith. All of a sudden they walked into 4 Sith. “Your time has come Jedi,” Chaos murmured. Multiple hissing noises sounded as the men activated their lightsabers. Then the Jedi activated theirs. “You will die!” Blue-Emissary yelled. Then without indication Blade jumped up and tried to dispose of Blue. Their sabers struck and, in an instant, Blade knocked Blues saber out of his hand. Blue went to pick it up then did an “overhead attack” swinging his lightsaber over his head toward Blade. But Blade sliced Blue right in half, down the middle, before his lightsaber even went over his head. He dropped his lightsaber and fell slowly backwards as his body disassembled. Tar took her dual sabers and slashed out at Blade causing them to lock together, as hers pointed diagonally and Blades was in the middle striking downward. Needler aided Tar slashing one of Blades arms clean off, he fled. On the other side of the battle field Tavo and Chaos were double teaming Daemon. Needler ran over with Tar to help Daemon. It was too late; he was in a final duel with Chaos. Tar fought Tavo. All Needler could do was watch. Daemon threw multiple attacks at Chaos, they were all blocked. Chaos lunged at Daemon, in reaction Daemon rolled backwards. “Holy Fuck,” Needler yelled, he was looking at a ship plunging into the battle site. It launched two consecutive rounds at Chaos. The first he blocked; the second nailed him and sent him flying back. He lay there dead. The ship landed, LINK exited and said, how’d I do? “good,” Needler said. Daemon had a bloody chest. They got onto LINK’s ship and healed him. After everyone was healed they got ready to take the ascent to the Mandalorian village. |
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| Darth Chaos | May 1 2005, 09:53 PM Post #18 |
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needle can i please live till the last issue i promise u can let me die then but please let me live what i think should happen is after they leave i should be found by some alien race and they will heal me and then i will kill them all and come bac full of rage and hate |
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| Daemon | May 1 2005, 10:35 PM Post #19 |
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soudns good and all but it would be better if i kill chaos, not the ship lol. Im writing my own aof story so thatll be semi-parralell to this one. |
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| IrishDragon | May 1 2005, 10:43 PM Post #20 |
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hehe not bad...work more on the detail, don't rush those fight scenes...I like how the first 3 chapters flowed from begining to end! Keep up the great work!! B) |
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| lloyd_strife | May 1 2005, 10:44 PM Post #21 |
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very creative and original you should put them together and if long enough make a book |
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| The_Needler | May 1 2005, 11:17 PM Post #22 |
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The Needler.....thats it.....
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yeah i was thinkin about that hehe. i plan on writing alot more.... |
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| Lynx | May 2 2005, 06:44 PM Post #23 |
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....can i be in it plz,plz,plz! :( :unsure: |
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| The_Needler | May 2 2005, 06:49 PM Post #24 |
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The Needler.....thats it.....
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lol just wait u kill helpless mandalorians...... |
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| The_Needler | May 2 2005, 08:29 PM Post #25 |
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The Needler.....thats it.....
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heres part of chapter V enjoy Chapter V: Mandalorians “Will I be able to come?” LINK said, stumbling over. “You’re pretty fucked up man I think you should stay.” Needler stated. “Yeah,” Daemon started “stay here you could jeopardize our mission,” And so the Jedi left, into the forest, dense with foliage. They came upon a Kuklok; it was panther like animal, not aggressive. They kept walking and soon found the foliage break away, they saw smoke. The Jedi ran towards the smoke praying it wasn’t the Mandalorians, it was. Their whole village was aflame, dead men and women lay all over the ground with slashes in them as if killed by a lightsaber. The Jedi scrambled around searching for survivors, they found none. But wait, they didn’t check the leaders compound. They ran in, there he was, Mandalore, the leader of the Mandalorians. He was a tall man with white-ish Mandalorian battle armor on. |
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| •X• | May 3 2005, 10:01 PM Post #26 |
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Lamers 4 Lyfe!
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omfg, Mandalore = ME!!!! |
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| The_Needler | May 4 2005, 05:34 PM Post #27 |
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The Needler.....thats it.....
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roger that |
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| The_Needler | May 4 2005, 09:28 PM Post #28 |
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The Needler.....thats it.....
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ok here is the 5th chapter: Slaughter this is one of the most dramatic and "from the heart" chapters in my book enjoy. Chapter V: Slaughter “Will I be able to come?” LINK said, stumbling over. “You’re pretty fucked up man I think you should stay.” Needler stated. “Yeah,” Daemon started “stay here you could jeopardize our mission,” And so the Jedi left, into the forest, dense with foliage. They came upon a Kuklok; it was panther like animal, not aggressive. They kept walking and soon found the foliage break away, they saw smoke. The Jedi ran towards the smoke praying it wasn’t the Mandalorians, it was. Their whole village was aflame, dead men and women lay all over the ground with slashes in them as if killed by a lightsaber. The Jedi scrambled around searching for survivors, they found none. But wait, they didn’t check the leaders compound. They ran in, there he was, Mandalore, the leader of the Mandalorians. He was a tall man with white-ish Mandalorian battle armor on. “Mandalore,” Daemon said “come with us, everyone here is dead.” “Please, call me X.” “Ok well either way we got to go,” They left, leaving behind all of the thousands of fallen soldiers. “Wait a minute,” Needler said “Do you see that?” he said as he pointed at an engraving in a wall of one of the burning buildings. It read: TAVO AND LYNX WERE HERE. “Oh dear,” Daemon whispered “what have they done…” They disembarked heading for the Academy on Dantooine. “This is Jedi toaster 55-69 coming in for landing.” No response. “Oh no,” Tar said “why…” They reached view of the academy, it was gone, burning. There were dead all over, everything destroyed. “Great Jesus,” Needler said, staring into the whirling fire. “Get me down there,” “Wait Needler,” “No get me down!!!” He jumped from the ship gliding towards the lake next to the academy “Motherfucker…” Daemon said “What the hell is he doing?” He fell and fell until SPLASH!! He hit the water, he got up, coughed and went strait to his the now burning home. “Alexa!!” he screamed as he looked for her. “Where are you!” nobody answered. “Please don’t let it be,” he said “why did this have to happen…” he reached a pile of rubble that looked like the remains of, Wait there she was! “Oh please no.” he lifted her up and checked her pulse, she was dead. He started to cry, his body filled with an unexplainable amount of both sorrow and anger. Words could not explain what Needler was feeling. Pain, sadness, anger, hatred, he felt dead inside. Daemon ran over to him. “We have to go come on!!” he yelled. Needler didn’t move. “Come on Needler!!” Still didn’t budge. Finally Daemon ran over and pulled Needler away from Alexa’s soulless body. “I will avenge you…” Needler said to her as he let go of her lifeless hands. if this were a movie i would have air supply: i just died in your arms tonight playin |
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| lloyd_strife | May 5 2005, 10:52 PM Post #29 |
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XD each time it only gets better great work on it needler |
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| bruticus | May 6 2005, 01:16 AM Post #30 |
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IM THE SITH OVERLOARD HAHAHA good sotry i will make sure to put it on the new site alright! meran time add some action remember il the really powerful one under ID muhahaha |
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